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Posted by godaironin on July 29, 2008 at 4:54 PM

Had some feedback from one of the FF sites today that was fairly positive.  Some of the criticism came for the ending, which admittedly is pretty ambigous (and therefore, appropriate for EVA).  Otherwise complete strangers like the story, which is a good thing overall.

Had some discussion with HaganeOokami over the "next" step and I've considered a number of options for a second effort.

#1) Expansion of BFOS: several readers have suggested there should be more background on the American side of the EVA program. That fits with the original story concept from long ago, but I cut out large swaths mostly to keep the story pace fast and fluid.  I have started considering adding "flashback" scenes to BFOS that fill in more of the details. That would effectively make for an expanded story (from 10 chapters to 12 to 13), and meaning that I would do a "version 2."

#2) Grand Expansion: this turns BFOS from a one-shot to a full-blown epic, something that I had prepared for when I started writing. This would vastly expand the story from 10 to 25 or more chapters, and touches on EoE (which is daring, to say the least).   I've got an outline already prepared for this, but the main issue is if readers can accept Rei paired with someone other than Shinji. A lot of that depends on reader reception of BFOS in its current form. If there's enough demand for it I might do it, though it would take about a year to finish with my schedule. I probably would change the title if I'm going to that extent.

#3) "Shadow of the Past:"  Another one-shot story concept, but this one is smaller than BFOS, and is largely a drama/mystery (not much action).  The jist of the story (set in the original series) is that Rei is kidnapped, and taken to a remote village in western Japan to see a dying old woman, who has an unusual interest in her.  Through the experience Rei has a bit of an identity crisis. The Who and Why are part of the story.  Probably 5-6 chapters if I do it.

#4) "Discoveries."  Another one-shot story, and also a drama/mystery.  The story centers on three students in Class 2-A who are NOT in the main cast. One of the three begins to put together the what should be already freaking obvious fact that none of the students in that class have a living mother.  That discovery triggers a reaction that no one counted on.  Explains a bit on how the "truth" in EVA is kept away from those not in the inner circle, and what happens when you get too close to it.  Probably 6-7 chapters. This one is a tough sell because it none of the cast are main characters in the story.

Readers might have guessed that I don't do EVA stories in AU.  Mostly this is because there are too many of them already in FF-land and nothing I do is going to add value to what's already there.  But writing within the confines of the original series (which already has an incredible wealth of material) challenges me more.  Hopefully that helps me work harder to get a story others can feel satisfied reading.

 

 

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